Saturday, March 6, 2010

chiasmus

...
i saw him;
drowning in an impossible feeling
that this
will happen again,
and again.
Like an asphyxiating prelude to deja vu.
.
A spinning web of noises;
aligned with a bizare perfection,
like black and white keys
running harmoniously beside a melody,
that at present, was unwritten.
.
The edge of
something unknown,
but something circular.
Something which smells of a pungent
futuristic blue.
.
But this time,
there's two.
And an ambiguous articulation
of a difficult subconscious.
.
ally.
[so i'm basically spending all my time (too much time)
writing stuff for ext 2.
which is excellent, but also really self-consuming.
also - i wrote a prophetic story two weeks ago.
that was insane.
it actually happened as i wrote it a couple of days later.
the only problem was, i had the characters the wrong way around.
mhmm.
and now i fly away from here.]

8 comments:

Catherine said...

I love how your poetry flows so wonderfully. It is rather tremendous.

Also, I would much like to read that story of yours sometime.

Anonymous said...

You're such an amazing writer :]

Ke said...

I enjoy your writting very much.:)

Snowman said...

Oh please continue posting. The way you write, it's beautiful. Your poems are so perfectly crafted it really is a delight to read.

Anonymous said...

I just wanted to say thank you for the comment. That means a lot :] also, i've been trying to follow people but it's not letting me? I have no idea what I'm doing wrong.

Ally said...

you're welcome Elena, i reaaaally like your blog. :)

to follow people, i believe you just have to click follow on the blogger bar thing up the top of the page? or down the side where it says followers? i'm not overly skilled with the interwebs. haha, sorry.

Beyond said...

i love it...

Cynthia said...

Your poem captures the ambigous
feeling of deja vu. A circular
mystery. Verses 2 and 3 especially
evocative.